It’s only a longing

Posted on by Reena Saxena
Hand holding an empty wine glass against a blue cloudy sky

I hold my cup up to the sky
A drink to quench impossible thirst
It pours in stories, on the sly

Ambrosia meant for gods – but why?
I wait for life on Earth to burst
I hold my cup up to the sky

A privilege divine, meant to deny
insights to denizens of Earth
It pours in stories, on the sly

What do they fear, or want to hide
tools of control, who came first?
I hold my cup up to the sky

Why do I ask, and why do they lie
Scripts that predict only the worst
It pours in stories, on the sly

We wrote gods to help us untie
knots of existence – blessed or cursed
I hold my cup up to the sky
It pours in stories, on the sly

W3 Prompt #229

44 thoughts on “It’s only a longing”

  1. That line about untying the knots of existence really stayed with me after reading. We spend so much of our lives searching for answers to big questions, wondering why scripts predict the worst, while the real stories just keep pouring in on the sly. Holding a cup up to the sky is such a vivid image of patience and quiet longing. It captures that feeling of waiting for life to burst open, even when we feel like we are left asking questions in the dark. Thank you for sharing these reflections. They gave me a thoughtful moment to stop and slow down today.

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  3. The way this villanelle holds the cup higher with each turn, first a prayer, then a question, then an accusation, is stunning. Reena, you’ve woven longing and skepticism into one form, where “It pours in stories, on the sly” becomes the pulse underneath everything. By the end, that shift from “why do they lie” to “we wrote gods” lands like recognition: we’re both the seekers and the ones who built what we’re questioning. The impossible thirst remains real even as we see through it.

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  6. I love how you approached this Reena – also thinking out of the box 🙌 it captures the frustration of looking upward for answers – whether to the heavens or authority – only to find manufactured scripts instead of truth.

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  15. Reena, the refrains change temperature as this one goes, and that is what kept me rereading. The first ‘I hold my cup up to the sky’ is a toast, almost a prayer. By the last stanza it reads like an accusation. Same words, different weight. ‘Scripts that predict only the worst’ caught me hardest, because it steps out of the myth and lands here, now, where stories get used as instruments. And the closing turn is quiet and complete: ‘We wrote gods to help us untie knots of existence.’ Not gods making stories about us, but us making stories about gods, then asking why they lie. The one place the poem tells me instead of shows me: ‘tools of control, who came first?’ The rest of it earns the question without the label. The cup and the sly pour carry the weight alone. Kevin

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      1. Glad it landed, Reena.
        One turn, then I leave it: reads like this are how I earn now. If you ever want one on a full piece (a poem you’re unsure about, an essay, a chapter), I read up to 2500 words for $20 and send line-level notes within 48 hours, what holds, what slips, where the weight sits.
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