Determination tinged with ….

Posted on by Reena Saxena

I still remember her look when she said
I, too, had a home… till yesterday evening.
I still feel the pain oozing through dry eyes.
stung by abandonment; frozen with shock

I, too, had a home… till yesterday evening.
Her loved ones threw her out, but she survived,
stung by abandonment, frozen with shock
Some day, I will build another home alone.

Her loved ones threw her out, but she survived
I still remember her look when she said
Some day, I will build another home alone.
I still feel the pain oozing through dry eyes.

W3 Prompt #162

37 thoughts on “Determination tinged with ….”

  12. Hi Reena – your pantoum beautifully captures the cyclical nature of trauma while maintaining hope’s quiet strength. The repetitive structure mirrors how painful memories echo, yet your imagery – especially “pain oozing through dry eyes” – is strikingly visceral and authentic. The transformation from victim to survivor, ending with determined self-reliance, creates a powerful emotional arc. Your technical mastery of this challenging form serves your deeply human story perfectly. Truly moving work.

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  14. Life can be brutally sad and it is our role to bring this to the attention of others through our poetic metier which is probably more effective than just breaking news. Well done !

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