Chosen 13 lines from my poem titled Eternity
a day, a month,
a year, a decade,
a century, an age
ride on predecessors
-carry bits of them
like concealed colors
of a spectrum
-highlight their gold
-leave imprints
on transient sand
knowing
the future will interpret
stories as they like
NEW POEM WITH INSERTED FRAGMENTS
desperation clutching on to
self-defined routines
non-negotiable
it is the only way to survive
a day, a month
maybe
a year, a decade
then it hits hard
it’s her contribution
to the plight of womanhood
across
a century, an age
because she chose
to ride on predecessors
failed to live her own life
setting examples
was beyond boundary lines
she rues her inadequacy
watches the demons
carry bits of them
like concealed colours
revelation of which
shows the environment in bad light
they invent grandiosity
of a spectrum
–highlight their gold
Both creators of a future
leave imprints
on transient sand
but in different ways
both vulnerable
in their passivity
or aggression
knowing
or not knowing
the future will interpret
stories as they like

I like both very much. The fragmented poem brings greater depth and insight.
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Thank you so much, Melissa!
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Thank you for this beautifully reflective reminder of the passage of time and its stories!
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You turned the fragments into a beautiful poem!
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Thank you so much!
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The way you filled it out it really made so much more… sometimes poems really grows with more
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Thank you so much, Bjorn!
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I like this form and your example of it, Reena, – it’s like adding yeast or a sourdough starter to flour and getting a whole new loaf…
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I love the analogy 😊 Thanks, Frewin!
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Very cool! I loved the initial lines and the new, reconstructed one!
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Thank you! I was looking for a fragmented effect, and somehow, this one was on the top in my Word doc
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I think it’s brilliant! 🙂 You’re welcome!
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A HUGE wow from me! Beautifully stitched together …..
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A BIG THANKS from me, Helen! You made my day.
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Bravo Reena – a brilliant blend – these I especially liked
“watches the demons
carry bits of them
like concealed colours“
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Thanks a ton, Laura!
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Great poetry! 💜👍💜
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Thank you so much, Patty!
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a different way to enjoy poetry, Reena…
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I enjoyed writing it 😦
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💖
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An interesting approach. I love it! xx Michael
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Thanks!
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stunning poem, Reena! I loved this one well done my friend! ❤
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Many thanks!
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