out in the open
-dreams I nursed secretly
tend to go wild
they wanted a separation
ardently, secretly so…
Wild
out in the open
-dreams I nursed secretly
tend to go wild
they wanted a separation
ardently, secretly so…
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I love the thought of dreams like this… somehow I imagine dreams growing into an adventurous garden.
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That is wonderful. One can expand on the theme 🙂
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Delightful poem. It’s so hard to critique these Japanese forms! If they’re done well they float away and if poorly they thunk. This does not thunk! The words fit the form so gracefully – and the image is fresh. I’m reminded a bit of Emily Dickinson, whom I greatly admire. Also I’m quite enamored of the word ‘ardent’
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Thank you so much! The reference to Emily Dickinson is flattering.
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I like the thought of dreams going wild out in the open.
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Thank you, Frank!
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