capture life in shots – clicking away
I see time quickly ticking away
loveless life – in search of a meaning
transient emotions slipping away
I help someone, and look in their eyes
embarrassed gratitude inching away
but reciprocal acts do not come by
I need them more than they need me, I say
I claim my spot in Nirvana land
emptiness inside gnawing away
Nirvana land
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It often does seem that giving is not a 2 way street.
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It sure does. Thanks, Bryans!
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Good handling of the form. The theme is slightly contrary to the traditional Ghazal (but what do I know?), except a humanist stance comes through which I enjoyed.
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The theme of traditional ghazals used to be pain, love, separation, admiring beauty from afar, intoxication and revelling in a sea of emotions. It emanated from the separate lives that men and women led with a ‘purdah’ system. It will be more of imitation or imaginattion, if written about in present times.
Thanks for reading and commenting!
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Very thought-provoking.
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Thank you, Rosemary!
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“I claim my spot …” yes indeed, wonderful Ghazal
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Thank you so much!
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My pleasure Reena
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Ah! That emptiness is felt in your words — this lookout, search, and need for a connection is so emotive. So difficult to find but worth cherishing when found. Well penned!
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Thank you, Anmol!
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The way I read it is so sad, even if it seems to end in some kind of reward… the one we really expect is the reciprocity in life.
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Bonding cannot be one way. Thanks, Bjorn!
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It is so hard not to receive…
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I agree. Thanks, Ruth!
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As I read this, I felt the source for it was quite deep. My cursory understanding of “nirvana” was a kind of bliss, a kind of paradise. So thinking about it here for about half an hour, I decided to investigate the Buddhist frame of reference and was surprised it meant “quenching” and to be exact quenching normal human “fires”..and desires.
This then is a really deep investigation of loss, and the feeling of loss, that in itself can lead the way to a higher understanding of that loss you so quietly and yet exquisitely explore in this poem. I like that it takes time and effort to explicate. A poem like that does indeed lead one’s psyche to a higher realm, a place of essential contemplation. Very well executed in meaning and in form.
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Let me thank you first for the time and effort spent in understanding this.
Nirvana is moving beyond attachments – at times it is forced by disappointment with life, not a conscious quest to enter higher realms. Those who believe in reincarnation also believe in ‘Moksh’ – the final stage where the soul moved beyond rebirth. There are no more lessons left to be learnt. In other words, one can say that a soul achieves god-like status.
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I read this as a commentary on the modern world, superficial interactions, self-absorption. We will be empty unless we can fill ourselves with love.
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It is also about a search for love.
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I specially like the idea of reciprocal acts. Giving and helping someone has its own rewards. Thanks for taking part of our Poetry Form challenge.
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Thank you, Grace! How often do we crib about colleagues/friends not being there for us when we needed them?
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People never seem to get the give and take thing write Reena. They take too much and we feel mad, they give too much and we feel bad, feel guilty. I have said it many times, but balance is so important – but so difficult to achieve and even more difficult to sustain. Liked your poem here “Re-Sax”! 🙂
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Just being a taker can gradually break a person’s spirit — unless it is a planned looting exercise.
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