I see
masks being peeled off
revealing
hollowness beneath
confidence crumbling
to fall in heaps
on slithering ground
I hear
insides screaming
on being scooped out
but getting cleaned up
in the process
I feel
the helplessness
on being sucked into
quicksand of life
(44 words)
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Heavy words…one can feel the desperation of being weighted down…indeed when one’s life is desperately out of control it does feel as though one is sinking into quicksand. Well done.
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Thanks, Dorianna!
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Desperation and helplessness screamed out from these lines
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Yes. That is the theme.
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Your first stanza has the quality of nightmares, Reena with the hollowness behind masks and crumbling confidence. The phrase ‘sucked into quicksand of life’ is very effective.
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Don’t we get ‘sucked’? Thank you, Kim!
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well done Reena, the format of your words and how they sounded really felt like sinking into quicksand, very creative and on point
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Thank you so much!
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Interesting imagery – slithering, scooped, sucked out.
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Oh! You made me aware of repeated use of the Same Syllable. It was not Strategic though 😊. Thanks!
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The mark of a poetic mind.
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Wow! That was intense. Good writing!
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Thanks!
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Oh my. This brought to mind a phrase worthy of contemplation …. what you see is what you get … or so the saying goes.
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Some people say ‘What you think is what you get’. Does anybody think of being here?
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Despite the messiness, I like: getting cleaned up
in the process.
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Yes. Concepts and perspectives do change at that level.
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Very expressive Reena..a powerful quadrille.
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Thanks so much, Janice!
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I like the use of quicksand. Sometimes life is just like this. Well done.
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Thank you!
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Nice use of “quicksand” in the quadrille.
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Thank you so much!
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Life can be like that…
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For some people, yes…..
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Powerful images, Reena. So well done.
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Thanks so much!
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